오늘 처음 친 토린이 입니다.

걸리는 거로는
6번 운동할 때 음악 들으면 좋냐고 해서 좋다고 하고 이유 말할 때
efficiently랑 motivative를 사용했는데 문법이 좀 파괴된 거 같습니다..

그리고 8번에 마감일은 말했는데 첫 시작 날짜를 처음으로 하는 코스 요일이랑 시간을 말한 거 같습니다.

11번은
그래서 그렇게 생각한다라고 말하고
most of all, korean society is extremely competitive. to succeed in this highly competitive environment, people constantly try to improve their skills and build their careers. also, people have to work or study very hard. so, many of them are under a lot of stress.
so i think one way to reduce their stress is to host a party.
when i was an intern at an it company, i worked very hard almost every day. so my boss invited my team(party를 빼먹었어요ㅠ).
as a result, it relieves my stress and it is helpful for my mental health.
also according to a recent news report까지 말하다가 끝났습니다..+


실수가 많아서 IH 안되겠죠? ㅠㅠ
처음이여서 이정도면 어느정도인지 알고 싶습니다..